Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Lolo

Lolo

• Nominated by: Emperor Jarjarkine File:StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg Senate Hall 22:08, June 11, 2014 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:May the force, be with me.

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Support

1. praguepride ^(Talk) 17:18, June 12, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Exiled Jedi

• Are there any quotes that you can add to this article?
• When adding a reference you should use <ref name="your ref name here"> not <ref>.
  • All checked.
    • There are still a couple of instances of <ref> without a name.--Exiled Jedi File:Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings) 00:37, June 14, 2014 (UTC)
• Intro and Infobox
  • I do not believe that you can source his homeworld as Kamino to the episode.
    • Removed
      • Now it is not sourced. Please correct this.--Exiled Jedi File:Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings) 00:37, June 14, 2014 (UTC)
  • As it currently is, the first sentence of the introduction contains too much information. I would suggest splitting the sentence and having the first sentence focus more on who the character is and when he was lived.
    • Done
  • You need context on the Zillo Beast in the introduction. Please make it clearer how it is related to the situation.
    • Done too.
• I'll continue my review once you take care of these.--Exiled Jedi File:Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings) 03:26, June 12, 2014 (UTC)
  • as now i am suppose to sleep (-_*) i can answer you to the first thing. hawkeyes never said one word except argg. So there is no quotes i can add. For the rest, i will do it tomorrow. Thx ejEmperor Jarjarkine File:StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg Senate Hall 04:05, June 12, 2014 (UTC)
    • Since I assume someone must name Hawkeye during the show, you could add that as a quote for the introduction.
• Your cite for the meters in the infobox still uses an unnamed ref. The current reference doesn't point anywhere.
• You need to state that he was male in the body of the article.
• You cannot source the personality and traits section to Episode II.
• I'll continue my review after you fix these.--Exiled Jedi File:Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings) 00:37, June 14, 2014 (UTC)

praguerpide

NOTE: These are just suggestions to make reading smoother. Any and all of these could be argued against :P --praguepride ^(Talk) 13:05, June 12, 2014 (UTC)

• consider rewording "..., although living beings were not affected by it." in bio --praguepride ^(Talk) 13:05, June 12, 2014 (UTC)
  • Discussed via IRC --praguepride ^(Talk) 16:50, June 12, 2014 (UTC)
• consider rewording" ... and some others..." in 2nd bio paragraph. Were these "others" other clone troopers? --praguepride ^(Talk) 13:05, June 12, 2014 (UTC)
• consider removing "...in the incident." from "...but Hawkeye was killed by the beast in the incident." --praguepride ^(Talk) 13:05, June 12, 2014 (UTC)
  • Discussed via IRC --praguepride ^(Talk) 16:50, June 12, 2014 (UTC)
• P&T is very short. Is there anything else that can said about him and his personality as a clone? --praguepride ^(Talk) 13:05, June 12, 2014 (UTC)
• Consider rewording "Hawkeye, along with many other clones, wore..." in Equipment. --praguepride ^(Talk) 13:05, June 12, 2014 (UTC)
  • Change Like to like --praguepride ^(Talk) 16:50, June 12, 2014 (UTC)

Master of the universe

Salut! I found a few things in my review:

• This may be a "sofixit", but you should link to the battle in the intro.
  • Done
• Additionally, keep in mind that things need to be linked in the infobox, the intro, and the body. I added a couple, but there may be more missing.
  • Done
• Procedurally, I don't think you can link his height to the Episode (infobox) and AOTC (personality and traits). The Encyclopedia entry should be best.
  • Done
• You should try to mention that he is a male somewhere in the body.
  • Done
• Could you try to add more info about how the Beast awakened?
  • It may be hard because, there's not alot to say
  • Done
• He's the one who gets squashed, right? Maybe add a bit more context to his death.
  • Done
• One more thing, you mention the gunships in the intro, but nowhere else. You should find a way to add it or simply remove it.
  • Done
• Great work! Corellian PremierFile:Jedi symbol.svg^{The Force will be with you always} 02:10, June 13, 2014 (UTC)